The Young Boy who Wanted to be a Soldier
War, war, war, war
That's what everybody thought about-
Defeating the enemies, bringing them to their knees,
Coming home to glory and reward,
Eyes beaming, blood warming,
That's what the boys looked upward to.
And then, there was only a boy.
Excited, he joined, too.
His family proud and elated.
Shining boots, stunning uniform, and splendid thrill
Were his when he marched to the war.
With cheers and loud trumpets,
The boy marched like a full-grown man into the war.
Yet, he was only a boy.
Dark and dingy the trench was,
Blood dripped from the wounds as he lay,
Begging God for his return home.
Then the mustard gas held on to him, not letting him away,
Choking him slowly.
He was only a boy.
War, war, war, war,
That's what killed the boy.
He lies all alone,
Cold like a rock,
In a graveyard with no marked stone
That no one in his family knows.
Now, he is a boy forever.
Image Sources:
http://www.battlefieldtours.org.uk/somme1.jpg
http://www.users.zetnet.co.uk/dms/past/ww1/trenches/ww1b-013b2.jpg
http://www.rwilt.com/troops2.jpg
http://www.old-picture.com/civil-war/pictures/Warfare-Trench.jpg
http://www.ww1battlefields.co.uk/somme/images/contal/contchatmich.jpg
Thursday, January 22, 2009
The Young Boy who Wanted to be a Soldier
Posted by HyeJin at 7:43 AM
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4 comments:
hye jin,
Your poem was really great and touching! I liked how you used repetition in the right places. Good job! :)
Kirenjot
Hye Jin,
I thought your poem was really good and you used repetition really well. Also the rhythm was really good. Going back on the repetition it was really effective how you always referred back to how he is just a boy and not a man. The picture were also really fitting to the poem.
Nat
I really enjoyed your poem. It had lots of meaning and was very deep. I also liked how you repeated the war,war,war. It just seemed to add a good hard feeling to the poem. I also really liked how you added in lots of senses. Overall it was a great poem.
Hye Jin,
I really liked the repetition of 'War, war, war, war' at the beginning of the first and last stanzas. You used many effective, descriptive words such as splendid and elated. Those words really added on to the stanzas. Overall, the rhythmic feeling of the poem is used very well and gives the poem ad very nice feeling whilst you read it. I also liked how you used the idea 'yet, he was a boy', in the stanzas. Your poem is very powerful and is very well done. Nice job.
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